My most recent cruise was with my 17 co-workers, which was an amazingly great time! I will admit that we were the loud and slightly obnoxious group in the customs line; the ones that you're secretly wondering if they will actually let such rascals on board! Amazing...What made this trip all the more unique was that two of my co-workers missed the boat as we left our first port. I don't mean that as an expression, but in the literal "they missed the boat" sense! Allow me to elaborate.
Our excursion in Costa Maya, Mexico was basically a free reign of a beach and free drinks all day... For anyone that knows us, this was better than Christmas morning! When it was time to leave this glorious place we took the bus back to the port; though some of us had to wait for the second bus back. My co-workers were told several times exactly when the ship left for the Cayman islands. I feel I should mention these guys were 21 and 27 at the time... Long story short, we're all back on the ship when suddenly we hear a squawk come over the loud speaker looking for our two co-workers! The mini-snorkel adventure ended up costing the lost voyagers $1400! They had to travel from Costa Maya to Cancun, to Miami, and finally meet us in Grand Caymen two days later... Not exactly ideal!
~ Alexis
hullo, blogging-buddy! well, the title instantly pulled me in & made me want to read more. you structured it well (with a sprinkling of photos). one comment would be that it seemed a little word-heavy, a little long. (not that every post has to be a paragraph (no!) but just something to keep in mind).
ReplyDeleteWow, I love the design of your blog. It feels very... summery? vacationy? The design gives your blog a very relaxed feeling.
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Lemon, your entry feels too wordy. You could have broken up the gigantic block of text with the anecdote in it but even doing that the post would still be too full. I'd suggest sticking to one point, like your anecdote of spending $1400 to catch up with the cruise ship, and only mentioning other stuff as necessary to set up the anecdote or joke.
(Love the seashells and sand dollars!)
...and I agree with Tui Elephantus and Lemon; you've got too much telling going on here. Your first paragraph does do a great job of drawing us in, but you have to think about framing the story, which means you have to leave out some details. Try cutting out some of the details and repost it. What do you really want us to know about this trip?
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